Sunday, December 16, 2012

Closed Reading #4

3 comments:

  1. The topic that you choose is really interesting. And the way that your essay starts with the beginning of the article and progresses to the end is nice for the reader because we haven't read the article. When the author was traveling to visit his family, what was the weather like? Foster's talked a lot about weather and how that translates. Was it stormy or gloomy? In the second paragraph, you could talk more about syntax or make a separate paragraph for it. I really liked how you talked about the "lack of details" that he holds back that is the missing puzzle piece to the article.

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  2. Your syntax paragraph was very well executed, I thought. A+ for you! You introduced the claim of the paragraph, supplied evidence and a warrant of the initial syntax, then evidence and warrant of the concluding syntax, and gave an explanation as to why this shift occurred. My only suggestion would be that you should probably elaborate on what sort of "effect" this change in syntax indicates. While it's implied that his tone shifts from mature and moderate to sullen and curt, I think that you should be explicit about this to make sure your reader totally understands what "effects" you're talking about.

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  3. Vivian,
    Your whole essay as a whole flows very well. In the first paragraph you don't really have a thesis statement which left me unsure how you were going to talk about the author's use of DIDLS in the article. You did a great job elaborating on all the examples especially in the sytax paragraph like Michaela mentioned. One thing you didn't really talk about was the authors purpose for writing the piece which i think would have been great to talk about at the end of your post around where you were talking about how the author was playing with the audiences emotions. By talking about the author's purpose it really reenforces your understanding of your article and is a great way to end the essay with a strong conclusion. Great Work Vivian!

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